When you appeared in spotless white
I knew your face no more,
but I could see you felt at home
when you walked through my door.
The sun shone bright, yet not a ray
did fall into your eyes;
I could not spot a speck of truth,
nor could I read your lies.
When you appeared in spotless white,
I knew not what to say.
So I said “Hi, it’s been a while”,
and “How are you today?”.
There was no time for When and Where,
there was no time for Why.
We stood and saw what time had done,
were speechless, you and I.
When you appeared in spotless white,
it brightened up the house.
But did you come as just a friend,
or did you seek a spouse?
Your answers I did not await,
they mattered not to me.
I locked you in my attic and
I threw away the key.
This is Magpie Tale 82
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Note: Last change 20110919, because of Suz's comment and because I also felt there was room for improvement
Dichters-cv
Liefst schrijf ik poëzie met kleine woorden
die niet vermaant en geen taboes doorbreekt
maar alledaags van ’t alledaagse spreekt
een symfonie van simpele akkoorden
Ik heb geen grote opdracht te vervullen
zolang ik maar een mondhoek om zie krullen
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Interesting piece... love the flow of words, building to a turn unexpected.
BeantwoordenVerwijderennice take sir!
BeantwoordenVerwijderenJJRod'z
you have a good cadance going on here
BeantwoordenVerwijderennot sure about the last stanza...
"or to become my spouse"
A good take on this dark image, white notwithstanding! I like the strophic flow and rhyme you have used. The image prompted me to rhyme also...
BeantwoordenVerwijderenA refreshing view of the prompt, here. Well controlled cadences in the verses.
BeantwoordenVerwijderenSimply beautiful!
BeantwoordenVerwijderenLoved it!
an elusive world lurks
This a beautiful poem for the prompt Niels!
BeantwoordenVerwijderen:-)
That's one way to deal with unwelcome visitors! LOL
BeantwoordenVerwijderenamazing, well done.
BeantwoordenVerwijderenYou used rhyme beautifully in this Mapgie!
BeantwoordenVerwijderenvery interesting piece of writing
BeantwoordenVerwijderenI love the chilling repetitive first line. Well done...
BeantwoordenVerwijderenawesome...
BeantwoordenVerwijderenThanks for the nice words,
BeantwoordenVerwijderenSuz, thanks for the comment; that was really helpful